The use of big data in the medical field aids the medical community in heightening the quality of patient care. Big data allows for medical professionals to better diagnose, treat, and prescribe medications for patients in a timely manner.
Hi, Emily,
Your first sentence provide background information that can be included in your introduction paragraph but is not part of your working thesis. Your thesis should focus on patient care rather than a focus on the more general “advantages.” You want to be focused enough to be able to address the topic in depth. Good start!
Hi, Emily,
Your revised working thesis focuses more definitely on patient care. As we discussed in class, you may decide to focus more on one or two to those topics rather than all three, to make sure you go in-depth enough.
Hi, Emily,
Your first sentence provide background information that can be included in your introduction paragraph but is not part of your working thesis. Your thesis should focus on patient care rather than a focus on the more general “advantages.” You want to be focused enough to be able to address the topic in depth. Good start!
Hi, Emily,
Your revised working thesis focuses more definitely on patient care. As we discussed in class, you may decide to focus more on one or two to those topics rather than all three, to make sure you go in-depth enough.